hey everyone,
lately I've been putting some late nights into writing a story of sorts. Currently it's around 5,000 words. I decided that now I have the premise of the story, I might want some people reading the shit I've written so far and tell me what they think. Any takers? Please, don't hate, just constructive criticism. I'm quite proud of my work so far.

I'll read anything as long as it has paragraphs.

it has lots of paragraphs...

Posteth the pdf and I shall do my best to tell you what I think.

you should briefly summarize what you have written thus far so we can tell you if it interests us

Can I know what it's about so far?

shit. how do i do that?

i dont have a pdf program on my computer

You don't have adobe reader?

I mean, it doesn't have to be pdf, that's just the format e-books use and the one I'm used to reading.

oh right, it's about a depressed kid who hates himself because he has this weird ability. He can control light(i know that sounds stupid). After he causes a major problem, someone else who claims to have the same abilities aproaches him and gives him 'instructions'. It takes place in Seattle, so there is a VERY large emphasis on rain. Seattle is very rainy and the people are stereotyped to be depressed all of the time.

Actually I'd love living somewhere where it rained a lot. It's depressing living in a desert where it only might rain a few times a year.

rain can get ya down, bro. 'specially in seattle

So, "bro" are you going to post this story or what?

I'll give it a read. Also, I plan on visiting Seattle sometime soon. That sounds kind of creepy but oh well.

yep, here we are. i finally decided to go with google docs. enjoy!
https://docs.google.com/document/pub?id=1u0KKuRaR7MJsmu-uk0u4_hgDR2zqrKlL8VL1G5dcy_Q

It can't be as ridiculous as my story about a human who is augmented by a nearly extinct ancient dragon species and must save them from evil terrors...heheh.

A rainy depressing story about light...I can deal with that.

Alright, I'll read it after this episode of Shuffle!

hope you like it

Just finished it and I must say I like it so far. I guess the only thing I would suggest is introducing the character's powers in a more subtle matter, rather than jumping straight into it. Obviously it's your decision and so far I really like it. Be sure to keep us updated on any revisions.

Also "my sister stairs in to the fire contemplating something. I’ll probably never know. I just hope it has nothing to do with me". Do I sense some possible foreshadowing ;)

haha! maybe, bro. im glad you like it so far! ill experiment with introducing it a more subtly. Writing this has been really fun so far and I am so excited to receive praise and criticism already. thanks a lot, bro!

He’s a tall black kid who always has something witty to say and is the star of the swim team.
Of course the black guy.
But otherwise an amazing story.

what can i say. i needed a black dude...? but thanks

>She's got amazing dirty blonde hair and the most beautiful emerald eyes.

This is me you're describing.

Liking it so far, but a little too much intro on the main character.

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It's pretty good. If you find a good editor, it'll do fine.

do you have a friend that can control light?

Holy shit dude, it's awesome. Keep writing!

haha! thanks man! definitely keep a look out. ill post latest copies here every now and then

Oh god it's double spaced. D: I'm going to read it now.\
Also in case you didn't know, you can download your documents from google docs into pdf form, it's pretty cool.

EDIT: "You know that old shitty anime show, Avatar: the Last Airbender" dude I fucking love that show. :(

Before i get into reading this, can you tell me a bit about your experience with how google.docs did with the file? or perhaps how you might feel about it in general i guess.

I've had a few scripts i need public for various reasons and been looking for places to deposit them outside of file hosting.

/blinded by my HD monitor and white walls. Must. Find. Brightness.
/Reading.

Woah woah woah, kaede, you have adobe reader? Why would anybody use it?

Some games have guides for it, what else opens .pdf files?

....Or was that sarcasm?

Good thing I like you, Noire.