It was sarcasm, I don't usually beat my games with guides. I don't use pdf as I can usually figure everything by myself. UNLESS IT GAME THAT HAS YOU COLLECT OBJECTS THAT HAVE NO RELEVANCE OTHER THAN TO EXTEND THE LIFE OF THE GAME.

I don't really mean to be a picky floozy about your work but this post is really just a few things that stand out as odd to me. Don't think of it as hate, but just some notes that pop into my head.
I read a lot of Clive barker and books from the Herbert family, so i might have lost touch with the first person perspective and direction of these things.

The tempo, set at the beginning i don't dig so much. It makes me think more of a comic book's first few pages in the first issue - which i don't think translates well when its all congested to this first block. Let me learn about the character a little slower, instead of all at once. i found my self listing past a few ticks of information at times which i go back and read again later.

"By bending the light a bit, I could see through the mirror that Lilly was clearly not happy about this."
This blurb strikes me as odd. I know, shes with friends. Shes probably pretentious enough to span her abilities all the time but the next line says that distaste well enough. It touches well on one thing a person might forget though, light's path and the effects on vision.

Once we get to football captain the writing picks up quite well, gets my attention and moves on. Not really talking about the episode at the dance but just the flow. With a little more time i see you doing well here. its hard to concentrate on the right details, i know that much but i see potential for thing's I'd read on the metro.

I think that is all i will say for now.

//I got a pdf reader on my phone. Makes metro a little more interesting.

This makes me want to start writing again.

Interesting idea for a story, I'd love to see more.

i use xpdf

also this novel'' is one of the shittiest and most uninspired pieces of crap i've ever seen a kid stillbirth onto the public web before, if not the worst. you get a -30 points for the bad story, -5 for the annoying format, and -15 for your writing style. congrats you get -50/100

I think I hate you now Bob.

can't even take a joke

that WAS a joke?

wait, why is it tagged, "write a novel about this novel"?

I didn't do it, I swear.
By the way, you wanted to know if I'm a guy or a girl.
I'm legally female. That's all you need to know.

that's cool. i respect that

Kaede is lying.

@artificialcuntbox

You're retarded.

It's okay Randy-kun. Let him think what he wants to think.

STALK KAEDE-CHAN

Go away, troll. None of your posts are funny.

LOL